Skip to main content

Obsessive Intoxication: A Twisted Tale of Impulsive Desire and Love's Dark Side





Obsessive Intoxication: A Twisted Tale of Impulsive Desire and Love's Dark Side by Stevie Kinchen
My rating: 2 of 5 stars

The story opens with our primary character 20-year-old college student Diana in pain over losing the love of her life. She's cutting herself and she's screaming out loud (literally) in pain. No one hears her in the home. She's loved this person since she was 15 and he was a 34-year-old instructor at her school. While her mother treats Diana as if she's a pre-teen, her father and older sister treat her harshly and with little regard to how their words will impact her. I won't reveal the connection the "love of her life" has to the family. But needless to say, he is an intricate member of the family. As the story builds and you are anticipating a major reveal and showdown, it drops you. The ending /showdown is wrapped up in 3 very short sentences as if the author ran out of steam. Unfortunately, this story was a very difficult read. Not because the topic was difficult to follow or that the story was not one that didn't have "legs", but it was riddled with inconsistencies. I think for me to provide constructive feedback on this review, I'll use a pro, cons and random bullet point format with examples.

Pros
> The plot
> Familial dysfunction touched on
> Addressing unhealthy relationships and associations
> Incorporating the voodoo element to honor Louisiana

Cons
> Underdeveloped characters
> Little to no formatting or structure
> Sophomoric & stilted dialogue didn't seem to fit the characters or the story
> Poor execution
> Poor transitions
> Incorrect word usage Example " My heart harms when I see him with my sister" OR
> Diana says she cuts herself on a package she was trying to open and Michelle responds "Do you expect me to believe your hocus pocus?"
> Contradictory statements Example - Michelle instructs Diana to get a kettle out for tea. Michelle then states "What are you doing? Did I say to get the kettle?" or after Michelle instructs Diana to put the kettle on the stove, Diana responds I don’t know how and then two sentences later screams " I know how to make tea" and details the steps.

Random-
> Who were the characters? Why were they so cold toward each other?
> Why did Diana love Xavier so deeply?
> Xavier was no longer her teacher, but he called her baby and she called him sir. Their interaction implies a D/S element. Was this the case?
> What happened to Diana?
> Is there a part two that resolves all the unanswered questions?

I would love to see this story re-formatted, re-edited and re-released. This is a good story that got lost in execution. And I am positive this project is not indicative of the author's talent. That being said, please read for yourself and be sure to leave a constructive review.


Now let's get you that book!

Reviewed by KayBee
#justmytwocents

Comments

Popular posts from this blog

The Audacity to be Divine: A Soul's Journey Towards Illumination

  FROM NYC HOUSEWIFE TO MODERN DAY SAINT "The Audacity to be Divine: A Soul's Journey Towards Illumination" -A Compelling Story of the Eternal Quest for Spiritual Truth in the Context of Our Time- This is the true story of Mary Mrozowski, an ordinary 1950s NYC housewife (turned divorcee and single mother) who became an extraordinary social activist, international organizer, and world-renowned spiritual leader. Written by her daughter Judith, " The Audacity to be Divine" is a revelatory tale of transformation, resilience, and unparalleled truth-seeking. ABOUT THE BOOK: Mary was a quintessential New York housewife living in the depth of despair. Bearing the secret of her family's tumultuous past, Mary reclaimed her truth and strove for redemption against all odds - transcending as a social activist, international organizer, and spiritual leader for the masses. Mary was able to transcend worlds. Having integrated Christian modalities with Eastern philosoph

Wives, Fiances, and Side-Chicks of Hotlanta

Wives, Fiances, and Side-Chicks of Hotlanta by Sheree Whitfield My rating: 2 of 5 stars Description Sasha Wellington has put herself on the fast track to success. Fresh out of college, she's got her career as a fashion designer and entrepreneur all planned out. Her only wild card is choosing which city to launch from. When fate points her to Atlanta, she sets out to make her dreams come true...  Before she knows it, Sasha's befriended by two rival BFFs. First, there's Norman, savvy stylist to Atlanta's stars, from the A-list on down. Then there's Paris, an outrageous personality with a questionable nightlife. Between their antics, Sasha's beyond grateful for her coworker, Casey. Married to an NBA player, Casey's got class. But there's more than meets the eye to being a baller's wife. And the more time Sasha spends among the movers and shakers, the clearer it gets that just like on reality TV, the truth lies behind-the-scenes. Stil

The Sound of Violet by Allen Wolf Book Tour Spotlight

The Sound of Violet  by  Allen Wolf       Publisher: Morning Star Publishing  Pub Date: September 21, 2021  Audiobook: TBD Purchase Your Copy Today!!            Amazon Link         Barnes & Noble Link        Signed Copies Link        Add to Goodreads Description - Desperate to find a soulmate, Shawn goes on one awkward date after another until he encounters the alluring Violet. He starts dating her, but his autism keeps him from realizing that she's actually a prostitute. Shawn thinks he's found a potential wife while Violet thinks she's found her ticket to a brand new life. This hilarious and dramatic award-winning story has been adapted into a major motion picture. “Entertaining, well-paced, and highly visual.” “Wolf, an award-winning filmmaker, has adapted this first novel from his own original screenplay, and its cinematic potential clearly shows. The high-concept narrative is entertaining, well-paced, and highly visual. It’s a charming, humorous, and hopeful tale.